Your body on my
So we can't be together
In this bonding tie
I want your eyes all on me
To feel my desperation
The need to be hesitation
Driving you crazy
I want to kiss your body
To feel the hill of anxiety
it letting my mind
Taking in what A lovely sight
I want to eat your soul
And devour your love
I want to have
Everything is mine.
6 comments:
Wow, these are some strong feelings you are presenting to the crowd. You know I am not sure if the sentence "I want to eat your soul
And devour your love"
really makes sense because it portrays a horror scene in your brain. You should maybe say, I want to mesmerize your love and get lost in your soul's beauty. This seems more reasonable.
Well, if I use your sentence then that doesn't really portrait im a greedy person and want everything isn't it?
wow~ greeeeeeedy
nicely said Lorita xD
Well, that kind of makes sense. Okay, then never mind; don't change it. ; )
I did not really know you wanted a greedy tone.
WOW Quoc! After readings Lorita comment I reread your poem, and I saw a horror scene. LOL Pretty strong, and greedy feelings!
I know!!! Dalvinder, can't you see the person actually devouring the soul. I mean I don't know about you but The Texas Chain Massacre comes to mind.
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